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Astro: Boy of the Stars episode 1 pt. 3Chapter 3The door to my house opened to my mom’s face, which was full of worry.“Toby!!” she cried, wrapping me in a super-tight hug. I gave a little groan of annoyance, “Where on earth were you?! I was so worried, I—,” she broke off, seeing Inspector Tawashi standing there. Her face got pale. “Toby…” she started, but Tawashi interrupted her.“Oh, there’s no need to be angry, Mrs. Tenma,” he said hurriedly, “Your son hasn’t done anything wrong.”“Oh? Then, why…?” My mom trailed off, her expression confused. “Good to see you home, Master Tenma,” our housebot said to me as I stepped away from the front door.“Hi, Orrin,” I said. I gave an abrupt yawn, suddenly feeling extremely tired.“Would Master Toby like something to eat?” Orrin asked.“No… No, I think I’m just going to g
Astro: Boy of the Stars episode 1 pt. 4Chapter 4“…Reports of what seems to be a robot with rockets flying through Metro City…”I froze, toothbrush in my mouth as I walked from the bathroom to my room, past the stairs where I could hear the news playing in the living room. I strained my ears, and suddenly the news report seemed too loud, making me give off a small yelp of surprise and rub my ears.“OW.” I said, my mouth full of toothpaste. Whoa, I had super-hearing??“…Theories of a project that the scientists of the Ministry of Science were testing out is the only explanation at present, though there are no confirmed reports, seeing as the scientists are keeping silent. What do you think, Ben?…”So they thought I was a robot, huh? Makes sense. I went back to the bathroom and spat the toothpaste out of my mouth.I’d gotten back home just fine, seeing as my parents, who both worked at the Ministry of Science, were working late
Astro: Boy of the Stars CH 5A/N: I'm really not satisfied with this chapter guys. It's just: I'm afraid it's too convenient, or coincidental, or random or... something to that effect. Please tell me what you think!_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Chapter 5“Whoa, whoa, WHOA!!” I narrowly dodged a tree, doing a twirl in the air before landing on the ground more-or-less gracefully. At least I’d landed on my feet this time…It had been four days since I’d gotten these powers. Lately, since I couldn’t sleep anymore at night, I’d been sneaking out and heading to Metro Park, just outside of the city. I’d hoped the undercover of trees would at least keep people from seeing me. Also, I knew it was a good place to practice because there were rumors of wild animals in the forest, like rabid wolves or bears. The